Saturday, September 04, 2010

Left Behind

And here's another poem worth a comment this morning, "Left Behind," by Kristin Berkey-Abbott, from qarrtsiluni. Lots of layers of resonance here, from miracles to rapture. I'm a bit hesitant about two of the line breaks ("hungry / families"; "mystical / theology"), but these breaks between adjectives and their nouns, though not very productive in the poem, are at least not distracting.


Mark Granier said...

Thanks Andrew. I like that poem. Re the last line though ( 'We celebrated /sweetness, the important life lesson.'), I wonder if it needs those last four words.

Andrew Shields said...

I was going to make a serious comment about your comment, Mark, but I got distracted by this: