tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post5150011142564014988..comments2023-11-12T13:22:30.358+01:00Comments on andrewjshields: Fourth Daily Poem Project, Week Two call for votesAndrew Shieldshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02804655739574694901noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-28827155567608537032008-03-08T10:26:00.000+01:002008-03-08T10:26:00.000+01:00After some deliberation (and before counting up th...After some deliberation (and before counting up the votes), I have settled on David Malouf's "A Place in Tuscany."<BR/><BR/>I first put together my shortlist: Barry's "For the Birds"; Glaser's "Dwarf in the Shade of a Eucalyptus"; Prado's "The Dictator in Prison"; Malouf's poem. All of these seemed fully successful on a first reading.<BR/><BR/>But then comes the quibbling.<BR/><BR/>Barry's poem finally seems a bit too long, and I agree with Ina that the Keats material at the end does not work well.<BR/><BR/>Glaser's poem addresses similar material in much more compact form, but finally seems too elliptical and jumpy to fully work.<BR/><BR/>Prado's poem seems a bit too much like what anybody could imagine about the dictator in prison.<BR/><BR/>And Malouf's poem still seems to work, without quibbles.Andrew Shieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02804655739574694901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-8625765044347636502008-03-07T18:52:00.000+01:002008-03-07T18:52:00.000+01:00Andrew,I'll go with Overturn.Andrew,I'll go with Overturn.RChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14678775084337683859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-58610417253058866032008-03-07T08:29:00.000+01:002008-03-07T08:29:00.000+01:00Martha Zweig's =Overturn= gets my vote this week ....Martha Zweig's =Overturn= gets my vote this week ... along with an "honorable mention" for Adelia Prado's =Dictator in Prison=<BR/><BR/>-- dhshAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-62497029787862966942008-03-06T19:30:00.000+01:002008-03-06T19:30:00.000+01:00There's some elegnat stuff here this week. My top...There's some elegnat stuff here this week. My top three are Berry, Zweig, and Malouf. I like the ending of Berry, and the boys with the wren, but the opening with the hare and the Gross Clinic seemed preamble-padding, making for a weak transition; Zweig is a pleasure, especially neologistic usages like "I've ill-gotten again"; Malouf almost put me off with that long, syntacticaly complex sentence that begins: "in time" and ends, "pass," but then I had to admire the sheer elegance of it. In the end though the poem feels elegant and little more, whereas Zweig is edgy in a way I prefer. So: Zweig.<BR/><BR/>Prado is fun, but feels too slight to me, with its "dictators are people too" tongue-in-cheek insight.Donald Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06391024449222256377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-40985836325042136832008-03-05T13:10:00.000+01:002008-03-05T13:10:00.000+01:00My choice is "For the Birds" because of the striki...My choice is "For the Birds" because of the striking, vivid imagery, although the stuff about Keats at the end is disappointing.inahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16752905547845184008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-58039261945452533942008-03-05T00:11:00.000+01:002008-03-05T00:11:00.000+01:00Prado!Prado!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-52305224591445637032008-03-04T23:33:00.000+01:002008-03-04T23:33:00.000+01:00For the BirdsFor the BirdsJoannie Stangelandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06006768246992875405noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-60984101279666037502008-03-04T09:40:00.000+01:002008-03-04T09:40:00.000+01:00adelia pradotho martha zweig did make me smileadelia prado<BR/><BR/>tho martha zweig did make me smileswisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-52104246709822094502008-03-04T04:18:00.000+01:002008-03-04T04:18:00.000+01:00Malouf without a doubt .Sheer atavistic energy.Malouf without a doubt .Sheer atavistic energy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-20641142005422803772008-03-03T17:27:00.000+01:002008-03-03T17:27:00.000+01:00PS--did you catch the wonderful coincidence(?) tha...PS--did you catch the wonderful coincidence(?) that "Nora Barnacle" was published by Dedalus Press?Gabehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05320217117435696799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-25538200204483842942008-03-03T17:19:00.000+01:002008-03-03T17:19:00.000+01:00There was a lot to like this week. The last line o...There was a lot to like this week. The last line of Prado was perfect, and Berry's poem was gripping throughout. But I cast my vote for Martha Zweig--though I disliked it at first, I came to appreciate more and more the wordplay, the schizophrenic dyslexia that manages to convey meaning.Gabehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05320217117435696799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-12270514123779231002008-03-02T19:25:00.000+01:002008-03-02T19:25:00.000+01:00I liked the poems by Glaser and Malouf best. Both...I liked the poems by Glaser and Malouf best. Both poems compel me by the way the poets pay attention to both beauty and violence, simultaneously. In the end, I lean more in the direction of Glaser's poem because the stakes seem higher and the poem tighter. So my vote is for Elton Glaser's "Dwarf in the Shade of a Eucalyptus.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-52452293210094536932008-03-02T18:26:00.000+01:002008-03-02T18:26:00.000+01:00I vote for "The Dictator in Prison" by Adelia Prad...I vote for "The Dictator in Prison" by Adelia Prado. I liked all of it, but the last line sealed it for me.<BR/><BR/>I also really liked "Overturn" by Martha Zweig. I would love to hear someone read it out loud. It reads like a tongue-twister on paper...one that would be delight to hear spoken.<BR/><BR/>While I must caution against reading "For the Birds" by Ciaran Berry while eating (the brunch casserole I made was delicious despite my squeamishness) the imagery is too striking not to get a mention.Katy Loebrichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00107094782074333133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-47209944334804377112008-03-02T16:14:00.000+01:002008-03-02T16:14:00.000+01:00Martha Zweig!Martha Zweig!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-56704758746084850092008-03-02T12:28:00.000+01:002008-03-02T12:28:00.000+01:00Danielle Grace Warren. I also liked Prado and Malo...Danielle Grace Warren. I also liked Prado and Malouf.<BR/><BR/>I was surprised and pleased to see we're both in 'Snakeskin' this month. Well done us!Colin Willhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15627539650929533832noreply@blogger.com