tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post2150244764816241245..comments2023-11-12T13:22:30.358+01:00Comments on andrewjshields: DPP5Andrew Shieldshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02804655739574694901noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-58277939590232575102007-05-02T00:18:00.000+02:002007-05-02T00:18:00.000+02:00My vote goes to #33, 'Raptor' by Philip White ... ...My vote goes to #33, 'Raptor' by Philip White ... because it seems flawless to me, accomplishing so much of its story/message with subtlety, understatement, and implication.<BR/><BR/>If you're interested, my second choice is/was #35, 'The Current' by Karin Gottshall. Although I feel quite positive about it overall, it has a couple not-so-little flaws (to my ears/eyes) ... one such is the deja vu + horses remark, which seems totally UNintegrated into its surroundings.<BR/><BR/>FYI, I liked both of these poems "well enough" that I'm considering reading (maybe even buying!) the whole books in which they reside :D))<BR/><BR/>-- dhshAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-21239221384300722212007-04-30T23:03:00.000+02:002007-04-30T23:03:00.000+02:00Well, it's either 'Raptor' or 'Current' for me thi...Well, it's either 'Raptor' or 'Current' for me this week; I'll let you know which later. And who knows ... I may even end up choosing the one with the missing apostrophe after all. The voting deadline is when, again?<BR/><BR/>-- dhshAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-18356141283123046792007-04-30T22:32:00.000+02:002007-04-30T22:32:00.000+02:00Regarding Ackerson-Kiely's'On the Gentle Nature of...Regarding Ackerson-Kiely's<BR/>'On the Gentle Nature of Swales' :<BR/><BR/>"next years crop" -- a missing punctuation mark to annoy/disturb me (yet again) ... it will also (probably) keep me from voting for this (otherwise quite gorgeous) poem<BR/><BR/>-- dhshAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-57764891812458749102007-04-30T17:44:00.000+02:002007-04-30T17:44:00.000+02:00A clunky bunch. I don't find much here, only thre...A clunky bunch. I don't find much here, only three of the poems would I bother to read again:<BR/>30. O'Rourke, "Descent"<BR/>32. Bosselaar, "Friends"<BR/>35. Gottshall, "The Current."<BR/><BR/>Of the three I'm most partial to 35 because it's so simply direct and yet effective in its evocation of place, and place-names, and of the water and the minerals that make her sing. It's a bit more inflated than it needs to be, but it's still spare enough in its language so it's not overdone. And whereas some other poems here have bad enjambments, her "I was raised on cold cash and water / heavy with minerals" is kinda clever (cold cash and cold water...heavy with minerals). "Blood-hunger for stone-food" is effective too. #30 is tougher as subject matter but I never quite know what it is the poem wants to tell me. The mother, who seems interesting in the manner spoken of, disappears and it's the "sights" of a newborn we're left with. Those cats are pointless and the geese shapes one of those reaches for image that leave us none the wiser. In #32 I applaud the lines: "I don't / want to explain this further, I'm done with it." But the rest of the poem, risking that gnomic self-importance poets are prone to, delivers clingy iterations like: "it's you seeding the first beat into the heart / I open." Shazam! Was it good for you too?<BR/><BR/>so, I'll go, grudingly, for #35. At least I'd like the poet to show me around some beaches...Donald Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06391024449222256377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-28763694916690750972007-04-30T12:20:00.000+02:002007-04-30T12:20:00.000+02:00I vote for Baggott.cheersI vote for Baggott.<BR/>cheersSarahJanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02497062670296130228noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-20782819.post-40788691667916624092007-04-29T21:40:00.000+02:002007-04-29T21:40:00.000+02:00Here's my ranked list (my favorite is at the top):...Here's my ranked list (my favorite is at the top):<BR/><BR/>35. Karin Gottshall, "The Current"<BR/>32. Laure-Anne Bosselaar, "Friends,"<BR/>29. Don Share, "Ruby"<BR/>33. Philip White, "Raptor"<BR/>34. Paige Ackerson-Kiely, "On the Gentle Nature of Swales"<BR/>31. Julianna Baggott, "Q and A: Do you write about real stuff or do you make it all up?"<BR/>30. Meghan O'Rourke, "Descent"Bruce Loebrichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12059122376071341389noreply@blogger.com